Khalid Mukhtar
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About Khalid Mukhtar

I live in suburban Chicago with my wife and four children. I spend a lot of my free time writing classical poetry. I am also an aspiring novelist and have two completed manuscripts of fiction drama.

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Bolingbrook, Illinois

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Of Love and Loyalty

Khalid Mukhtar

I really like the style of narrative, and the surprise element in each story. When an author can keep you reading past the "what", to seek out the "how" and the "why", then you know you're hooked.

I particularly liked "The Wait". The unexpected last line in the story had a real BAM effect.

Keep them coming.

Dec 20 '14
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Karma Is A Bitch

Khalid Mukhtar

Good plot, the telecom backdrop works well. I also like how the characters are being developed. I am seeing some issues with language that distract from the narrative. Chapter 2 had an uncomfortable change in tense while discussing Shreyan's fear of flying. Also, grammar needs some cleanup, can be off-putting to see errors in the third-person narrative. Finally, rather than be told something like "Shreyan was arrogant..", I'd rather read his character development to arrive at that conclusion - need to weave that in a little better.

If it weren't for these little issues I found, the story and plot are excellent and beckon me to want more.

Dec 15 '14
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