The glass palace
I slept and found life is beauty, woke up and found life is duty
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The language and flow is good...but the chapters tend to be too long...I missed the connection....please have this reworked... make it more gripping
Thanks Reema. Will see what I can do.
Very impressive and natural style of writing
Keeps the reader engrossed. However the real test is how the story progresses. The synopsis gives equal weightage to both the sisters but the summary says its a story about the elder one. I would love tp read further to understand how the author etches out her character.
Analogies are mostly good. However that bit where she greets the caller with a Hi Manav seems to be a bit out of place. Probably the writer could include one two lines prior to it so that it becomes clear that she is immersed in Manav s thoughts.
Overall good effort but please put up more chapters. Love and my best wishes. Keep writing!!
Thank you so much for posting your review. I am glad that you liked the writing style. We have a limitation of 3 chapters but I do hope you can get to read the full book soon. Appreciate your comments and will take care about the points highlighted by you.
First the positives
1) Nice story line. It would be interesting to see the evolution of a young city bred lad
2) Language: is free flowing and simplistic.
Some areas that the author may revisit
1) City of Pune: The author wants to project Pune but the potrayal does n't come across clearly. The love of cricket and food would hold true for most cities in India.
2)The altercations between the parents need to look more realistic
3) Some more areas which I would want the author to revisit are
# Taheer waiting for 10 hours before he raised an alarm
# How do the writer's parents let him go alone in that state?
#In the village esp in Dada's time a male associated with child birth would be a taboo. It was mainly done by midwives. That part needs to be tweaked to make it more realistic
Overall Nice effort!!! Would like to read further!!
Good job!!! I think the author is making an attempt to connect spirituality with everyday living. However there are certain inconsistencies that need to be tajken care of:
a) IT guys will NEVER allow one of the owners to go out while investigation is on. He might try to flee or tamper with evidence elsewhere.
b) These people don't seem to be middle class people. In that case, they need to borrow or get a private equity investor get them the money. Whatever the case, they need to give regular updates to banks. One person individually cannot hoodwink the entire system; it has to be a cohort
- Grammatical errors need to be taken care of. Write short sentences and as far as possible avoid the repetition of adjectives.
Waiting to read further ..the theme s very interesting. Keep going
Thanks for taking time out for reading and giving feedback!
Hi there...its funny... but to me it seems to be an overdose of Chetan Bhagat; the language used and specially the style a prologue and the chapters. Some sentences need to be reworked as well. The synopsis talks about so many incidents...it would be interesting to see how you weave them together. Upload more chapters and ensure that you bring in your signature style. All the best!!!